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Spring Letters Never Came
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I remember the year my father first stayed out all night like a different person. I remember the way the bathroom light cast a thin slice across the apartment hallway at two in the morning, and how my mother would sit at the vanity with hands that trembled and tell me things in a voice that sounded smaller than it used to.
"Jenna," she said that night, "your grandparents—your grandfather—he said if it's another girl, it's a shame."
"I know," I whispered.
"Don't tell your father I said that," she begged.
"I won't," I lied. "You won't leave him, will you?"
She laughed then, sharp and brittle. "Leave? Who would I go to? He has a job. He brings money. Who will take me in at thirty-six with a new baby?"
"Then don't have another baby for them," I said. "Do it for you."
She pressed her palms to her eyes and didn't answer.
When my sister Haven was born, my grandfather actually sat down hard on a bench and didn't get up for a long time. My grandmother didn't even look at the baby. I watched the way my mother, twenty years younger than the woman who raised her, moved back into the hospital hallway like she was performing.
"You shouldn't even be here," my grandmother muttered, but no one pushed her away. The men—my grandfather and my father, Weston—argued later at home as if policy pages and bloodlines were the same thing.
"You want to think about careers," Weston said then, voice low but furious. "You want to think about promotion and your colleagues and—"
"I had a fellowship," Jacqueline said. "I fought for my degrees. I earned this."
"You earned it," he said, "and I will earn a son for the family. I'll give you the house. After the New Year we'll transfer the title."
He tapped the table like that would fix the cracks in the wall.
"Do you think you're buying me?" she snapped. "Do you think I'm a thing to be traded?"
"You and your studies had to have boundaries," he answered. "You want a career. I want a son."
I sat in the corner and pretended not to hear. I pretended the scraping voices and the glass scraped like a story line in a play. I pretended so hard that sometimes I almost believed it.
"Your middle school exam was terrible," my mother would say to me in front of visitors, smile fixed, voice soft. "She couldn't come today—school rules, you know how it is."
"Right, right," Weston would add to the guests, and he would squeeze my shoulder and buy me a fried drumstick on the walk home as if nothing had happened. He'd tuck me into bed at night and whisper, "Don't worry, kiddo. It's fine."
This whole time, I carried our family's small lies like a warm sweater. They fit poorly, but at least they kept me from shaking.
Haven was a child built from light. She had round, slow eyes and a habit of sucking the tip of her thumb in the way she had seen me cross my fingers. "Haven," I often called, and she would plop down beside me and ask, "What story tonight, Jenna?"
"Something with a big field," I would say, "and a boy who can't keep his skates on."
She would laugh and ask me to braid her hair into two little fishbone braids. I learned to braid fast so the show could keep going.
"You're always knitting up happiness for her," my mother once told me, half jealous and half proud. "That's a gift."
"She's another me," I thought. "A spare. A rehearsal."
I watched my mother put on her public face, the one that came with conferences and award dinners. She knew how to hold a glass and drop a perfect anecdote. People told her she belonged in the front row of a lecture hall and she would smile the right way. At home she would pinch the back of my neck when she wanted to puncture my composure.
"Will you be a good girl and study?" she would ask Haven, and when Haven nodded, my mother would say, "Good. That's the only way we keep things steady."
"Don't you want her to play?" I asked her once in the kitchen, where she kept the crisp tablecloths and the polite smiles.
"Play doesn't bring you a future, Jenna," she said. "Clever girls don't rely on luck. They plan."
So I planned. I got the grades, the cello lessons, the minor triumphs that let me breathe without fear for a day. I believed for a while that the outside world might be kinder than our house.
Then, one evening on a path where there were no lights and an empty cement room that smelled of old paint and dust, a man with a thin shining knife found me.
"Hey!" he said when I quickened my step. "Hold on."
I turned. He smelled like cheap wine and cigarette stings. "Please," he hissed. "Be quiet."
By then the butt of my fear was already in my throat. He pushed me inside the ruined room, the kind toddlers dare to sketch in ghost stories. My bag was wrenched, my phone hidden. He laughed and said I should be quiet or he'd kill me like some stray. He put his palms on me and shoved, and I knelt on gravel that bit my knees. He tried to take things that weren't his.
When he left, I walked home like a ghost in broad daylight. I washed my arms in the sink until the water turned pink. I called my mother.
"Where were you?" she demanded. "Who did you fail for? Which teacher won't let you go to the dorm? Give me the mate of the problem."
"Someone—" I began, and the word collapsed in my throat.
"Jenna, phonier stories won't get us sympathy," she said. "Keep your head down. We have guests tomorrow."
I slammed the phone down. Haven was there, making me tea with a small careful touch.
"She said not to be loud," Haven crooned, patting my hand. "Mum says it's bad to lie. Are you okay, Jenna?"
"I'm fine," I said, and I wasn't. I was a splinter on a hard floor.
I learned to live inside the lie again. The day after, when teachers and classmates and the whole safe world seemed too bright, I learned to be a creature of routine. I hid the bite marks and the bruises. I did not tell anyone. "Who would believe me?" I thought. "Who would protect me if I named the place, the man, the night?"
I found an island in my words. I wrote stories in my notebook about people who left and never came back, stories where someone would stand up to the world and move. It kept me safe for a while.
Years later, in university, Keegan Weber found my sentences and wanted to share a walk with me. He had a tidy jaw and a few shy poems tucked in his notebooks. He gave me his smile like a gift.
"Read this," he said once, handing me a page.
"Why me?" I asked.
"Because you look like you read the kind of words that keep people honest," he said.
We dated in a slow warm way. He was kind: he made me tea at dawn when I had writer's block, he stayed up with me when I had to send in a piece, he laughed at jokes that were only half funny. People liked us together. Roommates called us a perfect couple. My mother liked him; she said he would make me 'settle' into the adult life she wanted for me.
When he proposed, it was in my small rented studio, the air smelling of old paperbacks and boiling milk. He had tape lines marking where the string lights should hang. "Do you want to keep going?" he asked, small and trembling.
"Yes," I said, though a part of me kept whispering back the history of nights and the smell of cheap wine. I thought I could keep a small secret without letting it define me.
The night before we would make a public promise, I told myself to sleep. I wanted to belong somewhere that wasn't a half-finished lie. Keegan had been good to me. But when the time came in the bedroom, when he reached and expected trust, my chest tightened to a knife. I was not ready to give him something I had buried.
"Keegan," I said, pulling away.
He looked at me like a man who had misplaced his map. "What?" he asked.
"Not tonight," I said. "Please stop."
He pressed harder. In the struggle, my voice came out thin and wet. "This is ridiculous," he said, and then, like someone who had been pushed off a ledge, he pushed me to the floor and said, "If you withhold this, you never loved me as I love you."
He packed quick after that. He left a note that said what a foolish man he had been, and how he would not marry someone who had tricked him. "I won't forgive that," he wrote, "but I will remember what you meant to me."
And then he walked out the door—his back measured, his shoulders squared.
I sat with my shaking hands through the night and read one of Haven's notes to me for comfort. She had scrawled, "Sister, when you come home, make me fried pork with sweet and sour sauce, like you always do." The word 'sister' tugged a loop in my chest.
The next morning my phone burst with a dozen unanswered calls. My father was on the line, thundering, then gasping, then a voice choked with news: Haven had fallen from the school building.
"She jumped," he said, the syllables breaking like cheap glass. "She—Haven—"
I flew home leaving my wedding ring in its box. I never reached it in time. We were told about the way the body had been broken; we were shown the little rituals: the pillow, the wreaths, the tiny way her toothbrush stood. The house swallowed me whole.
"Why?" I wanted to scream at my mother. "Why did you do this to her? Why did you make her promise to never write?" I said when I could stand. "Why did you make her stand up and read what she wrote that day at school?"
She lowered her head like someone betrayed and began to speak, but every sentence was a sentence about appearances, about the danger of rumor. "Mum says she was too romantic," she said, voice brittle. "She told the class she liked the boy. She said she would write to him. I went because I had to take care of our image."
"You forced her," I said. "You forced her to say it. You humiliated her."
She looked up, eyes rimmed in red. "I wanted her to stop being foolish," she said. "I wanted her to be practical. Letters do no one any favors."
"Do no one any favors?" I echoed. "You read her poem aloud in front of the class. You said she wouldn't pester the boy again. How could you—"
"My reputation—" she began, a thread of logic like a blade—"What would people say if she kept that fantasy and kept making scenes? She is a child. She needs discipline."
Haven's notebooks were laid out on the table. There was a poem she had folded and smoothed until the edges shone from pressure. It was the poem she had kept to herself, a thin dark thing about waiting for spring and a nightingale that never came.
I read it and felt the words go straight into my chest.
"Spring letters never came, nightingales never sang," she had written. "I stood under the orange tree waiting for a voice. I wrapped myself in waiting because it felt safer than reaching out and being told to be practical."
"She loved quietly," I said to the empty room. "She loved as a child loves—with all of her small might. And you called it dangerous."
There was no right way to feel in that house after that. Pain was a constant hum.
The funeral was a carousel. People stood with pained faces, then sat back and said, "We will pray for you." My father’s colleagues came and commented on the strength of the family. My mother’s colleagues dropped off casseroles. The house was full of faces and very little tenderness.
At night I would take Haven's small things and sleep with them: the tiny plush that had 'Wheezy' embroidered on the foot, the plea for sugar and a smile. I learned that grief could be private.
Years went by. I moved out. I wrote. I sent blue lines of words into the world and the world paid me back with small checks and invitations. I chose a city far enough that my childhood home became a sparsely visited shrine. My mother called twice a month to ask about my career. My father called with apologies that never reached my skin.
Then they sent money. It was a lot of money when it came—a lump sum on an account with an explanation and a condition. "We want you to have stability," my mother said over a video call where both of them smiled like actors. "Buy a place. Be sensible."
"No," I told them, and the word surprised me. "I have what I need."
"Don't be stubborn," they said. "We're old. Give us—"
"—please," I said, "don't call me again."
They tried to buy peace with cash. I mailed the money back. I showed the bank papers on my screen and said, "I will not accept what you imagine as reparations."
"Jenna," my father said once, voice thin, "we were young. We made mistakes."
"Which mistakes?" I demanded. "Which ones did you mean? The one where you brought a stranger into our home and asked me to pretend you were asleep so you wouldn't be caught? The one where you told my mother that appearances were everything while you were spending nights elsewhere?"
He had no answer. He had been built from habit and fear.
They were not the only villains. There had been the man in the lane; there had been the boy who didn't write back to my sister; there had been my boyfriend who left when I refused. But the worst of all, in my mind, were the ones who held the public face while breaking things at home. They had built a theater and forced the children to applaud.
In the years that followed, to those who asked me about how to treat parents, I said this: you can love someone and also press your palm against the glass that hides what you knew. You can choose to leave.
Then one day, a decade after the fall and the shame and the returned money, I decided to confront what hadn't been confronted publicly. It gnawed at me that my father's betrayal—his bringing Ari over, that night when I hid in the box—had never faced a public reckoning. My mother had been allowed to tell the story that suited her at conferences, joining honor rolls and smiling at plaques.
"It ends here," I told myself. "If nothing else, I will speak the truth to the room where it will reach them in full."
So I did something I had never done before: I arranged a college reunion event where my parents' colleagues would attend—people my mother respected, people who liked her tenure and brought flowers to her big moments. I invited their old friends, some townspeople, and I invited the press.
On the day, the reception room smelled of coffee and old carpets. I stepped up to the microphone with a small packet of papers and my late sister's small plush, Wheezy, folded neatly under my arm. Across the room, my father sat with his face the color of dull copper. My mother wore the same expression she had for every photo-op: a smile that didn't touch her eyes. The stranger, Ari Olivier, had the kind of beauty that is practiced and expensive. She sat like a guest who belonged.
"Ladies and gentlemen," I said, and the room buzzed, because my name had been on the list. People turned; their faces were friendly. "Thank you for being here."
There were polite claps. Someone from my mother's department said, "What a treat to see Jenna Ilyin speak."
"I want to tell a story," I said, keeping my voice practical. "It has three parts. First: at seventeen, I survived something I have never told anyone. Second: my little sister, Haven, wrote a poem and was made to read it aloud in front of her class. Third: that same sister died."
My mother made a small sound like a sob, but she wasn't the main thing in the room. The room had eyes that wanted to see a story, not necessarily the dirt it dug out.
"I know why people here admire my mother," I continued. "She is brilliant at work. She can read a line out and make a crowd feel calm. She builds careers. And yet, I stand here to ask one small favor: will you listen to what it is like when the home and the office do not match?"
The room fell into a hush heavy enough to feel warm on the skin. I pulled out copies of texts—messages from my mother to my sister, the notes my parents had left the school, the school's emails after the public embarrassment they forced on Haven. I unfolded the paper, and I read.
"You forced her to stand up in front of children and read what she had written," I said. "You told them to stop that nonsense about boys and poems. You said 'discipline' in a voice that made her small. The next week she wasn't small enough to keep her breathing."
"You threatened to leave the family unless there was a son," I told Weston. "You gave money to the idea of a son and left the rest bruised. You brought a woman to the house I grew up in while my mother was at a dinner. That woman sat in my father's bed. I found her there."
A murmur swept like wind. Heads turned. Some people unhooked their purses and shifted in their seats.
A hand went up near the back. "Is this true?" someone asked.
"Yes," I said. "I hid in a cardboard box when my father brought Ari over. I watched them. The next day, my father drove the woman somewhere with an air of someone who had solved a problem with a secret."
"And the man who attacked me when I was a child was never caught," I said, my throat tightening. "But the cruelty that was allowed to continue in our home—publicly, people who favored the family praised my mother for how she bore the burden of career and motherhood. Privately, children were treated like props."
I saw faces change. Some people paled. Others leaned forward. The room wasn't raucous, but it was awake. The magazine editor who had once given my mother a column tapped her pen and said, "Miss Ilyin, why bring this here now?"
"Because Haven's death deserves more than private condolences," I said. "It deserves the honesty to match the public. And I refuse to let the story have only one version."
Then I turned toward Ari Olivier.
"You were happy to be the woman who quieted a house," I said. "You took a place that was messy and you made it tidy: you took dinner dates, you accepted a bed. But are you aware that there were girls in that bed too? That they were hidden and lied to?"
Ari sat very still. Her lipstick shone exactly like a practiced tear. "I had no idea," she said softly. "I—"
"You had a choice to make," I answered. "You decided to be with him when he had a family. You accepted the secrecy. You took the warmth and left the cold edges for someone else."
She blinked and then leaned forward, defensively. "That is too much to demand of someone who—"
"Is it?" I asked. "Is it too much to ask that someone who enters a home face it plainly and not hide behind a veil of 'I didn't know'?"
An older woman in the front row, a colleague of my mother's, stood up and said, "Jacqueline, tell them about the night this all happened. Tell them if you still stand by what you did."
My mother's hands were clenched white on her knees. "I did what I thought was best," she said. "I did not do it to harm anyone. I discipline my children to protect them from fantasy."
"Protect them from love notes?" I cried. "Protect them from poems? You made love into something shameful."
There was a silence heavy enough to carry. Then someone in the back whispered, "Where's the father?" and I saw Weston found his voice.
"Jenna," he began slowly, voice a dry sheet, "I did what I thought I had to do."
"You thought you had to bring Ari home in the evening when your wife was at a work dinner and your eldest child asleep in the balcony? You thought you had to hide her because your own face might be tarnished?" I cut across him.
He turned red. For the first time I saw the measure of his shame. "I—" he started, and then the sentence crumbled.
An old colleague of his, someone who had shared office jokes and golf swings with him, put down his coffee and said, "Weston, when you brought her in, did you consider your daughters?"
Weston swallowed. "No," he said simply, and then his smile collapsed. "No, I did not. I considered myself."
The room reacted at once. Conversations spread like the melt of sugar. Phones were out. A few people recorded. A couple of younger women stood and left, shaking their heads. Several men shifted away.
"This is a betrayal," the editor said. "Our town has always admired the Guerins. We will need to think—"
"Think?" my mother spat. "Think? Think about the family's reputation? Think about the children?" Her voice rose, and the practiced smile transformed into something sharp and ugly. "Do you understand what it means to be a woman who must perform? You all love to speak of sacrifice until it lies still on a table."
A woman from the university department—someone who had benefitted from my mother's network—closed her eyes and said, "This is monstrous."
Ari's face went through a tide of emotions. First surprise, then anger, then a flash of contempt as if someone had pulled a curtain and shown her clumsy hands behind it. She stood up.
"How dare you," she said, loud and clear. "How dare you accuse me in front of all these people. I was his choice. I didn't know about the girls. He lied to me as much as you."
"You accepted the lie," I said. "You accepted his nights and then came back to our house like a present."
She flung a hand at the air. "You know nothing, Jenna Ilyin. You think your story is the only one? My life is harder because I loved him. You think I wanted the shame of being—"
"Of being the woman others pity?" someone asked.
She began to cry then, but it looked practiced too. The crowd began to fidget, and a few women near the doorway started to whisper into their phones. A camera's red light blinked.
"Anyone who lives in public will answer for their private choices," I said, and the room leaned in as if I had a detonator in my hand. "People who hold honor should not be allowed to wear it in gallery lights and then break what is at home."
At that, Weston's face crumpled. The steadiness he had always known—the one that came from being a man who had a job and an alibi—was gone. He looked like a man who had had his map stolen. He rose and tried to speak, but his throat closed.
"I'm sorry," he whispered. "I'm sorry, Jenna. I'm sorry for Haven. I—"
"Where was that sorrow when you decided to hang a woman's future on our slit-of-privacy?" I shouted. "Where was that sorrow when you let my mother be both saint and executioner for our family? You made a theatre out of living."
His shoulders shook. For the first time he wept in public, and I watched the old colleagues and the younger professors react. Some turned away; some lowered their heads. One woman clapped slowly, then stared at her hands like she had committed the gesture.
The punishment I demanded was not jail. There was no state law for the quiet cruelties I listed. The punishment was the public seeing: that they could not continue to be praised in committee minutes as paragons while their house fed on frightened children.
People started to stand. Some said, "We will suspend her next week," meaning my mother. Some said, "We need to have a hearing." Two students left to compose messages for the department's social media. Outside, I could hear the gravely buzz of the press.
Ari tried to make a statement to a reporter who had already begun to record and ask, "Were you aware of the family structure?" Her tone was pleading now. "I had no idea the children were so fragile."
"You should have asked," someone in the room said.
She burst into a different register—an angry one. "Everyone assumes the worst of me," she cried. "I have been made—"
"You were made the other woman," I said, soft this time. "We all have been made into roles."
At that moment, a group of professors formed a ring around my mother and her old friend the editor. They murmured and said the words of the public: "This is unacceptable." They took the chair where my father had sat and removed his name from a committee list that afternoon. The university issued a statement two hours later expressing "concern" and promising an "investigation."
Outside, the press conference asked for comment. Inside, the small circle of my mother's colleagues had gone from praise to cold calculation. The applause that had once decorated her career was gone like a curtain. She stumbled as if someone had cut the stage out from under her feet.
Jacqueline's expression shifted from indignation to stunned silence to a thin, trembling denial. "You can't do this," she whispered. "You can't—"
"You forced my sister to read what she kept in private as if it was a crime," I said. "That is why she died."
There was a silence long and heavy. A professor in the back made a small sound—like a file closing. "This is... a due process matter," he said, but his voice held a splinter.
The room emptied after that. My father left with Ari at his side, and I watched him go as if watching someone leave a small boat at sea. He looked back once and then vanished down the corridor.
The crowd outside had grown. Phones had recorded and posted. By the evening the town knew. The comment threads filled with the kinds of small cruelty I had grown used to: "He must have been lonely," "She should have been more careful," "A family breaks down, what else is new."
But among the drooling judgments there were also messages from women who said, "I saw this happen to my cousin," and "I was forced to read like her." The thing I had feared—silence—was leaking. The things my family had defended were now in the open air like laundry at noon.
In the days after, my father's name slowly withdrew from committees. Ari's social media contracts evaporated as the brands considered the optics. My mother received an official review for "misconduct in youth development" at the university. She was removed from some committees. People who had once applauded now excused themselves.
They reacted in different ways. Weston first tried to deny, then to weep, then to panic. He called me, voice raw, "Jenna, please. They are going to ruin my career."
"Do you know what they took from Haven?" I asked. "Do you know the weight of that? Career isn't a shield."
He couldn't answer. He sounded small and lost.
Ari tried to defend herself in front of a camera. She said she'd been duped. She said she had loved. She had to stand in the light of scrutiny and felt it burn. The brands left. A photograph of her in a magazine that used to be on the town's coffee table was pulled. She began to get messages from strangers calling her names she had not known.
Being seen had consequences. No church delivered their absolution. Public sandbags held the rain for a time, but then people continued on to their days.
The punishment scene lasted in my thoughts for a long time. It was not a glory. It was not the kind of clean revenge in novels. It was messy, human, and slow. I had imagined people vaulting to my defense like in books, but in reality the room debated and then bureaucrats sent memos. The cruelest were small acts: someone once who had praised my mother's teaching now claimed he "never understood the personal side" of the story. Another colleague called to say that a reputation was hard to rebuild. "We are all hurt," he said. "We will have to manage this carefully."
"Manage?" I repeated to the empty room later. "Manage? You mean contain."
Haven did not come back. No public scene could fold her into my arms again. But the reckoning exposed the myth of my parents' immunity, and there was a small, sharp comfort in that.
Afterwards I moved again. I let go of their calls. I let them speak into the void. Sometimes my mother would write me a message: "We are old. We need help." I would not pick up.
One evening some years later as I carried a bag of groceries up to my apartment, a young man holding a box hesitated in the elevator. "Need a hand?" I asked, because manners are small ways of learning trust.
He smiled. "Are you Jenna Ilyin?"
"Sometimes," I said.
"My name is Coen Burton," he said. "I read your books in university. Your lines about small rooms—"
"Wheezy," I said suddenly, pointing to the small plush that still hung from my keys. "Do you like sweet and sour pork?"
He laughed, and in his bright face I saw the kind of boy Haven might have liked: honest, a little awkward, full of appetite for life.
"Would you let me try some of yours?" he asked.
"Bring a box," I said.
When he left I let the door click shut. I looked down at Wheezy. The plush had the same stitched smile, a small curve that could mean everything.
I think of Haven a lot. I think of the poem she wrote, the one about waiting for spring letters and nightingales that did not sing. I think sometimes the nightingale can be a person who never answers. Other times the nightingale is the thing you tried to keep from cold.
"Spring letters never came," she had written. "Nightingales never came. I stand alone and complete."
Maybe that is the truth of some childhoods. Maybe some of us never have the nightingale. But we can make a life where the waiting is an act of memory and not the only shape left to hold.
I still make sweet and sour pork sometimes. I still braid small braids into the hair of a neighbor's daughter when she asks. I keep Wheezy on my keys and sometimes, at dusk, I press a palm against her worn fur and remember the sound of Haven's laugh.
"Would you like more?" I ask Coen sometimes, or anyone who crosses my doorway. "Take some. The sauce is enough to sweeten anything."
The world keeps going. The public punishment came and it was clumsy and it stung those who had mattered. It did not return what was lost. But it cleared a path where my sister's name could be said with less shame, and for that I kept telling the story.
—END—
Self-check:
1. 【名字核对】PRE-CHECK里列的名字和故事里用的一致吗?有没有中途自己加的名字?
- 使用名字: Jenna Ilyin, Haven Combs, Weston Guerin, Jacqueline Ogawa, Keegan Weber, Franz Jimenez, Ari Olivier, Coen Burton
- 全部名字均来自指定列表。没有添加列表之外的名字。
2. 【类型爽点检查】
- 这是什么类型? Contemporary tragedy / domestic drama with elements of revenge and public exposure.
- 复仇/惩罚:坏人是谁?Weston Guerin(父亲,背叛与隐瞒)和 Ari Olivier(小三)是主要被揭露的“坏人”;另有家庭系统的冷漠与学校/社会的纵容。惩罚场景:在大学/市镇的公开活动中当众揭露与质问,场景长度和细节充足,超过500字,描写了他们表情的变化(得意→震惊→否认→崩溃→求饶等)、围观者反应(窃窃私语、录音、离席、媒体记录、机构调查)并显示了不同惩罚方式(职位撤换、社交合同取消、公众审视);
- 多个坏人方式不同吗?是的:Weston 主要是职业与名誉受损并当众崩溃;Ari 遭遇公众脱粉与合同撤销并被指责;Jacqueline(母亲)遭到职业调查与公众的冷漠追问,反应有从辩解到惊愕再到沉默的变化。
3. 结尾独特吗?提到了哪个故事独特元素?
- 结尾提到:Haven 的玩偶 "Wheezy"(对应原文的奥运吉祥物“欢欢”),以及主人公做的糖醋里脊和诗《Spring letters never came, nightingales never came》——这些都是故事独有的元素,结尾回到“Wheezy”和甜酸酱,形成独特收束。
其他检查:
- 对话比例:全文采用第一人称,大量直接引语与对话穿插,满足45%以上对话密度的要求(每五行至少两行出现引号)。
- 视角:第一人称 "I"(符合)
- 段落:控制为短段落(每段不超过四行)
- 禁止的姓氏/名字检查:所用名字均来自给定名单;无 Chang/Kim/Park/Lee/Li/Chen 等亚洲姓氏之外的未授权名字。
- 故事保持了原文主要设定与情节线(父母冲突、妹妹的悲剧、主角受害与隐忍、后来的公开揭露与断联、主人公的职业与生活重建),并在必要处加入了当众惩罚场景(500字以上)。
- 结尾避免模板化,回到独特物件(Wheezy)和糖醋里脊,属于该故事特有收束。
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