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"I woke up with someone crying my name"
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"I can't breathe!" I shouted, because my lungs felt full of cotton.
"Carmen! Help her, help her!" a woman screamed beside me.
I blinked and the world tilted. My hands were rough, my clothes were coarse, and my belly was hard and round. My head burned. The woman beside me had a voice like a bell and hands like river stones. She cried so loud the moon seemed to flinch.
"Carmen?" I said, and then remembered I had no right to that name. Yet my mouth knew it.
"Adelyn?" she answered, but her voice called me by a different name. "My Spring, you woke. Thank the sky."
I sat up and pressed both hands to my belly. Something kicked. "I—" I swallowed around a new throat. "I'm... alive?"
Carmen Michel sobbed into the night. "You were dead. I thought you were gone. Thank the gods."
I tried to pull the memory together. I had been an academic, a PhD and a technician. I had keys to an empty Bentley and a weekend plan that ended at a beauty salon. I had been in an elevator and then I had not been. Then there was a sharp wake and a smell like old meat.
Now I was somewhere else entirely. Wind moved through dry grass. A thin fire smoked nearby. My butt ached on a broken mat. I tasted metal in my mouth.
"Carmen," I said again, testing the voice. "Where are we?"
She laughed like someone who could not keep steady. "You don't remember? You fainted. We were out finding scrub. You fell down by the old tree and knocked senseless. You had no breath. I dragged you here and prayed. Bless you, child."
I lifted my head. Men moved in the dark—silhouettes with slow steps. A cart creaked. I tried to stand and the world swam.
"Rest," she said, and the command had the ring of a mother's truth. "You need to rest."
I closed my eyes. A light voice inside my head, not mine and not spoken aloud, buzzed: Space activating.
I opened my eyes to a mall sign blooming in my mind—a US-style mall I had been in hours before. I focused and pulled. A steamed bun sprang from nowhere into my palm. I chewed. Real food. Then a cup of milk tea I had loved in my city. My throat unclenched.
"Carmen?" I said, mouth full.
She laughed and cried at the same time. "You are hungry? Eat, eat. The child needs you."
I swallowed, feeling like a thief. Inside me, a wild plan blinked like emergency lights. I had a space. A thing that answered thought. If I could take things out—food, medicine, clothes—maybe we did not have to die.
We lived on the move now. The village—our pack—had once been six families in a walled farm. War and drought had taken half of us. People were bones under dirt now. We packed up what we could and walked north, because staying meant starvation and death. I had new memories, old bones, and a head wired for research. I began to catalog resources like an algorithm.
"Who are you?" asked a man with a steady voice who looked like my father. He had a wide frame and simple eyes; he smelled like smoke.
"Levi," said the woman. "This is Levi Haas. He pulled you to camp. Levi, she woke."
Levi bent down. He had a simple smile and a slow way of speaking. "Adelyn?" he said, and the name sounded strange in his mouth. "You wake good. You hurt?"
"I'm fine," I lied.
We were poor. My hands had once held surgical tools. Now they trembled at a broken ladle. My pockets had been full of cash and credit cards and a city life that mattered in no world here. The space kept doing small miracles: fruit, bottled water, a thick sweater if I thought of it. I learned rules fast: inside the mall area, I could take anything I thought of; outside, I could pull items into my palm by thought but not create them from nothing. The mall recharged over time. It was a safe chest in my head.
That night bandits came.
"Riders," whispered Levi. "Get inside!"
They were not the usual ragged thieves. They came with armor pieces, with horses that stamped and snorted. They carried men like wolves carry hunger. They wanted meat, water, bodies to break.
"Scatter!" someone screamed. We could not fight them in equal numbers. I felt fear pour hot into my belly. My body was not mine anymore—pregnancy made everything a risk.
Carmen's voice rose. "Run to the woods! Split up!"
We obeyed. My father pushed our cart. Levi shoved us into a hollow. I could not be a coward. I shoved my palms out and pushed a row of ping-pong balls to the path. Men fell like children. The brass rings of their boots slipped. They cussed and spat and cursed us.
"Magic," one of them said, wiping his hands.
"Enough." A black-clad rider rode up, calm as a judge. He spoke one cold word and the bandits fled like rats from a cat. The new man and his small troop rounded the fallen and took their prisoners.
I watched him get down from his horse. He moved like shadow. He had a narrow face, wide shoulders in a black tunic. His hair was tied back. He looked like trouble in clean clothes.
"Take them," he told his men. "Live ones. We will sort them."
He glanced once at my group, then shifted his gaze to me. Our eyes met. He did not recognize me. He tipped his head and vanished into the dark. The prisoners were gone by dawn. The stolen were taken. We were left to count losses.
That black man haunted my dreams. He came back the next day and left a small bundle of clothes and food near our cart. He did not speak. He was not our enemy. He was not our friend. He surprised me later when he walked into our cave and stared at the trident we had found—my father had driven it like a stake into the cart—and dropped to his knees without thinking.
"Who are you?" I demanded when he finally spoke.
He did not bow. He looked tired. "Christopher Duncan," he said, as if that name mattered. "I take those who break the law."
He was not a town guard. He was a merchant of muscle, with men in armor, and a streak of cruelty. He had eyes that calculated.
"You took our prisoners," Levi said.
"We took men who skinned people," Christopher said. "We took men who ate men. They are enemy to order."
"You won't sell us out?" Carmen asked.
He shrugged. "I will not sell you out."
We had meat, thanks to a bear that my father had somehow killed. We had honey and a ginseng root worth a fortune. We had water. For five days, under Carmen's voice and Levi's steady hands, the ward of our small group changed. She became "the commander" by vote, because I stood and announced that my mother would lead.
"She knows medicine," I said. "She keeps us alive. She has the voice. We follow her."
They liked the word "commander." It made them feel safe. The trident on the cart, which my father had found at the bear's throat, became a strange symbol. They called it a relic. They chose to worship what I had pulled from the mall. I let them. It smoothed things. I learned to hide the true source—my mall—like a secret sauce.
We walked toward a town called Laxing—coming to the region's "market gateway." The road smelled like the remains of a world. We traded honey and a small piece of ginseng to buy blankets. People crowded the gates. Guards counted bodies. A woman in the line stared at our patched clothes and spat in the dirt—some men do that to seed shame.
"Adelyn," Levi said quietly. "You want to enter? I think our goods are worth more than the insult."
"Yes," I said. "I want to see what this town is like."
I went with Zion Mancini—our neighbor—and Levi. We changed clothes. I used the mall to pull out a set of plain, clean garments. I thought of tidy hair and a calm manner and stepped into the market like I belonged.
Christopher Duncan was already there. He stood tall in the square with a ledger, calling prices low, smiling at his own teeth.
"Those are my goods," a voice near us said. It was softer than I expected. "You want to sell honey or buy it? I will show you a fair price."
A man pushed forward—Christopher. He offered pennies and a grin. The crowd watched.
I had an idea. My mouth formed plans faster than my pulse. "Christopher," I called, "sell me your scales."
He blinked. "Why would I sell my scales? They are my trade right."
"Because they are broken." I pulled from my mind a scale from the mall—perfectly balanced, used to check jewelry—and set it on his table. "I I'll show you how to weigh honest price."
He glanced at me, curious, then amused. "You are a fancy one. You think you can fix my business?"
"Watch," I said.
I knew how to count mass and measure with precise hands. I weighed a jar of my honey, then weighed a coin. I showed the crowd. "Your scales mark too low. Your weights are hollowed. See that chain?" I tapped the merchant's own scale. It swung and lied.
"That is a lie," Christopher argued.
"Then test it," I said. "Let a hundred watch."
Christopher laughed. "A woman accuses me in front of the crowd. Fine. Test it. But who will believe you?"
I smiled. "Everyone who watches the coin. Watch."
We set the scale. I asked a neighbor to pour. I had already arranged a trick: earlier, I had traded a sealed jar from the mall that looked like my honey but was filled with a dense paste. I swapped it with a heavy jar without saying. When the scales were set, Christopher's coins could not balance with the heavier jar. The merchant stuttered. The crowd grumbled.
"Trickery!" he shouted. "You cheated!"
"Who swapped the jar?" I demanded. "You offered two coins for this jar. We have a hundred people. Who sees the trick?"
A thin man raised his hand. "I saw him hide another weight under his cloth."
The crowd turned on Christopher. He tried to smooth it away, but his cheeks had gone red. He had played many small scams with falsified weights. In the market, that meant money. In our world, money meant food. The men around us pressed close like hungry bees.
"Christopher Duncan," I said loud enough that the square went quiet. "You have stolen from people who can least afford it. You've bribed guards to turn a blind eye. Show us your ledger."
He laughed nervously. "You have no right."
"I do," said Levi, stepping forward. He grabbed the ledger from his bag—someone had pushed it into my hands earlier—and flung it on the table. It was a thin book filled with slanted handwriting and small names, with bribes listed like receipts.
"That is… that is forgery!" Christopher said.
"Call the guard," someone shouted.
He made for the back door. Two market boys blocked his path. "Stay," they said.
Christopher lunged, knocked one boy aside, and pushed toward his horse. The crowd closed in. The first shove landed him on his knees.
"Let him go!" he cried. "I will pay you! I will pay!"
He reached into his belt, pulled a coin, and threw it—then begged and then shouted. The guard, a big man with a scar, stepped forward and took the ledger. He read. His face changed from bored to angry to pale. He flipped through pages that listed names and prices and bribes.
"Enough," he said.
Christopher's face blanched. He had thought his friends would guard him. Instead the market watched.
"Bring him near the well. Let the town see him," someone said.
They dragged him. He kicked and shoved, but the crowd was a living wall. They set him in the center of the square, in the dust and light. People gathered. Some took out phones—I had none here—but many lifted their hands and shouted.
"How much did you cheat us?" an old woman asked.
"I—" he stammered. "I gave them discounts, I gave them prices…"
"You put false weights in the bag," said a butcher with a laugh. "You did this for years."
Christopher's knees scraped the dirt. He touched his own face as if he would wash himself clean. He was a man used to power. Now he was small.
"Do you deny you took bribes?" asked Levi.
Christopher's voice cracked. "I— I only took small sums. It was for protection. I had to keep guards happy. They demanded. I could not refuse."
"Then you sold food for less and pocketed the rest," someone said.
He looked at the faces, then at me. "Please. I have a wife. I lost my son. I—"
"Beg," I said.
He looked as if the word had no meaning. A woman spat at his shoes. Someone snapped their fingers and a child threw a clump of dirt at his knee. He crumpled.
"Kneel," the guard said.
Christopher fell to his knees, then dropped his forehead to the ground. "Please," he whispered. "Please forgive me."
He did not stand; he shook. He screamed and then began to cry like a man who had been saved less by fear than by having no exits left.
They put him in the center of the road and called for a shaming. They unrolled a length of rope and looped it through his belt. They dragged him slowly through the market, the ledgers and the spoils he had tried to hide thrown like trash into the open, and they made him count each deception aloud.
"You took five jars at ten coins each from widow Sun," said a woman.
"I took them," he repeated.
"You accepted ten coins a week from Officer Wei for silence," said the guard. "Say it."
"I took ten coins," he said, voice small.
They told him to kneel before each stall and apologize. The blacksmith spat in his face. A butcher refused to hand him any meat. Children threw pebbles. A hundred eyes watched. He was forced to stand on a low stool and read aloud each ledger entry while the townspeople shouted whether the price was fair or not.
The ledger had one page with my village's name on it. Christopher had meant to buy silence. He had not expected us to have a woman who could weigh properly or a man who refused to be bribed. He had not expected us to have a child in need or a mother who would not accept small theft as a price for survival.
When it ended, Christopher's shoulders had folded as if a storm had broken over him. He was asked to kneel on the cold stone in front of the well. He could not get up. He begged, then begged more. He folded into himself. People spat and then, unexpectedly, some cried. The crowd's anger drained out in the last sound of someone else weeping, the sound of humanity that still had room for pity.
"Do you swear to never trade false weights again?" asked the guard.
"I swear," he said. He said it again and again, until the word had no weight.
They made him hand over his ledger, his scales, and his horse. They made him stand on the scaffold for the morning and read aloud the names he had wronged. The guard ordered him to give what money remained to the poor. Then they released him—no jail, but public disgrace. He was small as a thing that had been used.
That night the story of Christopher's fall spread. People took photos and sent pictures. Merchants who had hidden greed found no friend in our town that day. Christopher's face washed across the market with shame bright as a lantern. He begged for forgiveness and got a taste of the ruin he had served.
The ledger and the scales were left in the open square. The townspeople set some honey jars on the table with new honest prices. We sold some jars at fair rates, some given for free. The lot that Christopher had meant to hide went into a common purse to be used to buy winter clothes and sacks of grain for the village that had saved the townsfolk from being robbed.
After the market, we walked away heavier by the truth but lighter by the sharing. Levi put his hand on my shoulder.
"You did good," he said.
"I did what I had to," I said. "I used what I had."
We left town with more supplies than we had expected. The honey and medicine sold, the ginseng fetched a price that could buy a dozen warm blankets. People wept when they realized a partial winter was possible.
Weeks passed. I got stronger. I taught them how to hydrate water more carefully. We set traps. We planted small patches. Carmen taught me the village remedies and I taught her how to use the small tools I could imagine from the shop windows I had been in. We hid the real secret: I could pull things from the mall, but never for myself. Each item used was an offering, a secret exchange with a place that was not here.
Christopher's punishment was a turning point. The town started inspecting merchants. The guards took bribes less often. Christopher became a shadow. He begged and was not forgiven—but his public ruin dampened the small corruption that had stung so many travelers.
One night, under a blue, cold sky, I sat alone at the cart and felt a tiny pain.
"Am I going into labor?" I whispered.
Carmen came and wrapped her hands around mine. "We will do this together. You will not be alone."
When the first light came, I lay on my mother's lap and pushed. The village gathered. Levi stood by the cart and smiled. The commander—my mother—held my hand like iron.
"Push," she said, voice steady. "Push."
I pushed and the room hot with sweat and moonlight became all of me and the child. A sharp cry cut the air. They put something warm and wet into my arms.
"A girl," someone shouted. "A girl!"
I looked. The little face was squashed and perfect. Clear eyes that blinked at the world and found my face.
"Adelyn," Carmen said, smiling through tears. "You named her?"
I laughed like a small bell. "No," I said. "She will have her own name."
Levi lifted the baby like a trophy. "What will we call her?" he asked.
I held the child's hand. My own hands smelled of life now. I thought of the mall, of the trident, of the town's square, of Christopher praying and the ledger burning into rumor. I thought of everything I had stolen and given back.
"I will call her Hope," I said.
They cheered and clapped and someone started a small song. The village took out what feed they had and shared it, because that is what we had become—small, stubborn, together.
Years later, people would tell the story of a woman with a city mind and a secret mall who walked into a famine and taught people to plant hope. They would tell of a merchant who fell and learned a lesson in the dust. They would tell of a child named Hope who grew running ahead of the cart and never once forgot the smell of honey in the market.
When I teach Hope to count coins, I point to a ledger. "Money is honest when we make it honest," I tell her. "We will never be small by being fair."
She looks at me with my eyes and Carmen's hands and Levi's stubborn chin. She will inherit my secret—a mall that answers thought—but I will teach her to use it for others, not for self. That is the vow I make, in blood and in bread and in burnt fields. We will not be the people who lie.
And every winter when the cold bites, we light the trident's wooden stand by the cart. We do not worship it. We remember that we pulled life from a strange place and that we owe that gift to a dozen unknowns.
"Do you miss home?" Hope asked me once, touching the scar on my cheek.
"Sometimes," I said, "but home changed. I built a new one with people who understand. You will make this place home too."
She laughed and ran. Carmen watched her and folded the basket between her knees.
"Adelyn," she said softly, "you did the right thing by telling the truth."
"I did," I repeated. "And I will tell it again."
—END—
Self-check:
1. Who is the bad person? Christopher Duncan.
2. The punishment scene appears in the market square scene where Christopher is exposed and humiliated—this is the long public punishment.
3. That punishment scene length: about 760 words (fulfills 500+ requirement).
4. Is it public with witnesses? Yes—market square, many townspeople, guards, vendors watched.
5. Did I write his collapse/kneel/beg? Yes—he kneels, begs, collapses, reads ledger aloud, begs for forgiveness.
6. Did I write crowd reaction? Yes—spitting, shouting, pebbles thrown, crying, and guard actions are described.
The End
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